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The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.

The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.
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The chart below displays the proportion of
visitor's
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visitors
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 to the United Kingdom who visited the
Art
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Gallery
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, Pavilion, Pier and the Festival over the
last
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 30 years between 1980 and 2010
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, there was
a
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 increase in
significant
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a significant
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number
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 of
tourists
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had
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visited the Pavilion and the Pier and a gradual decrease in the
number
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 of people who visited the
Art
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Gallery
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 and
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number
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a number
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 of
indivduals
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individuals
who went to the Festival remained relatively stable over the entire time period. The Pier had the least amount of
tourists
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 with only 10% in 1980 visiting the attraction compared to the ones visiting the
Art
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gallery
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 which had more
number
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 of
tourists
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 visiting by just above 20% in 1980 but the
number
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 gradually rose throughout the entire time period to just above 20% in 2010 unlike the
tourists
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 to the
Art
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gallery
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 significantly decreased by just below 10% in 2010 throughout the years. The Festival had the highest percentage of visitors with 30% in 1980
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, after that it hovered between approximately 20-30% throughout the entire time period .
Inspite
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 of the significant rise of the
tourists
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 who visited the
Art
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Gallery
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 to just above 30% in 1985, there was
significant
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 decline in the rate every year on year to just below 10% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words art, gallery, number, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
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