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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

You have recently bought some furniture. It was broken when you received it. Write a complaint letter to the store manager and say - What and when did you buy? - Why was it broken? - Suggest how the problem could be solved

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the modern furniture that I bought from your store.
The first
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 thing, I bought a modern
table
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the
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apply
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made by Turkiye
furniture
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Furniture
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 the
brend
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brand
 of
"Sofa"
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the "Sofa"
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 chain of stores in Tashkent on March 21.The store employee told me that the
table
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 was very comfortable. The second thing, when I came home open the box which
is have
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had
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 my
table
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. It was broken. The purpose of getting the
table
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 was to please my disabled mother who stays at home all day. That's why I ask you to have my
table
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 set by
professional
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the professional
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 worker. I hope you can address
this
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 matter promptly
a
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suitable solution. Your's
faithfully
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coherence and cohesion
Consider rephrasing sentences to enhance clarity. For instance, instead of 'The first thing,' you could say 'Firstly,' to create a smoother introduction to your points.
Make sure to use correct article forms, such as 'the modern table'.
task achievement
It would be helpful to express more clearly the nature of the damage to the table to strengthen your complaint.
task achievement
You've made a clear effort to express your feelings regarding the furniture issue and the reason behind your purchase. This gives context to your complaint.
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Your tone remains polite throughout, which is commendable for a complaint letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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