The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years,there has been growing a discussion that
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should be shorter to allow a longer weekend.
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some believe that
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a shorter
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working
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would bring a drop in productivity,
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recon that
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beneficial for both employees and employers.By providing a new
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schedule
,companies will increase
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level of motivation and
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workers
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well-being.
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, a reduced working
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would improve
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mental and physical well-being.
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,countries like Sweden have shown that a four-day workweek can lead to increased job satisfaction without a drop in productivity.Many
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struggle
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high
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of stress and insufficient rest. By giving
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more time to relax,they can return to work feeling refreshed and more motivated.
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,a longer weekend can enhance productivity rather than reduce it.
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,scientists say that relaxed people
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less
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mistakes and more concentrate than
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who work without
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.
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,more working hours often
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lost
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of motivation and overwork,
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shorter
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schedules
will provide more comfortable conditions for
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.
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make
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it clear that
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well-rested
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are more motivated and accurate in their
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. In conclusion,
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a shorter
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working
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is a good opportunity to increase
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productivity
and level of satisfaction in
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.It can
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make the workplace better for everyone.

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grammar
Ensure you proofread your essay to correct spelling and grammatical errors such as 'recon' to 'reckon', 'shcedule' to 'schedule', and 'prodoctivity' to 'productivity'.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to help guide the reader through your arguments. This will improve the logical flow of your essay.
task achievement
Include a wider variety of examples and perhaps counterarguments to strengthen your points and show a deeper exploration of the topic.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt clearly and states a position, which is essential for task achievement.
task achievement
You have included relevant examples, such as the reference to Sweden's four-day workweek, which enhances the credibility of your arguments.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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