The graph below shows the percentage of people unemployed in the total labour work force across 9 countries in 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of people unemployed in the total labour work force across 9 countries in 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the percentage of people unemployed in the total labour work force across 9 countries in 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following table indicates the rate
jobless
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of jobless
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individuals accounted for in the workforce of each country separated by the years of 1994 and 2004.
Overall
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,
although
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there were 4 nations with the
unemployed
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unemployment
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rate achieving above 10% in 1994, the number dropped significantly to one only in 2004.
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the unemployed in
Poland
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made up over 10% in both years, Japan contrarily always held its own to the lowest and Ireland saw a significant decline. As 1994 mentioned, Ireland stayed up above with an unemployment proportion of 14.8%, surpassing
Poland
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with 12.4%.
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Canada and Italy were those with a great figure of people out of job, 11.8% and 10.6% in the
labor
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force respectively, the others acquired an under-10% ratio of laid-off citizens, especially Japan with the lowest one, 2.7%. In terms of 2004, the most tremendous decline took place in Ireland when its jobless percentage dropped to 4.4%, even lower than
Japan
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, 4.7%.
This
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trend
also
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happened in other nations, except for
Poland
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, Germany and Australia.
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Australia saw a steady rise, both
Poland
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and Germany witnessed a dramatic one, 19% and 9.4%
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respectively
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words poland with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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