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Writing Samples
Band 5

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter say what the participants liked about the hotel explain why they were unhappy about the food suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Lucas and I am writing
this
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lette
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letter
 with
the
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apply
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regards
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regard
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 to your hotel which my company visited
last
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 weekend. I would love to write
you
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to you
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you
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your
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 hotel was built
on
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in
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spectacular
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a spectacular
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 place with
breathtaking
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a breathtaking
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 view
on
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of
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 the valley.
Moreover
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, my employees absolutely love
you
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your
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 wellness area. There are plenty
different
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of different
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kind
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kinds
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 of
sauna
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saunas
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 and
spa
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spas
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.
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Also
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 they were
dying
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dying to
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 play a minigolf which is quite difficult to finish. That was a perfect
competiton
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competition
 among them.
However
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, my employees were
extremly
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extremely
 unhappy with
you
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your
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food
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 service. They waited 30 minutes for
entre
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the entre
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,
it
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which
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 was
small
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the small
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 dish. And
also
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 they waited another 30 minutes for
main
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the main
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 dishes.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, when the
food
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finally
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 floor staff brought, we saw
fingerpritnts
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fingerprints
 on the plates and
also
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plates
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the plates
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 were so cold.
Moreover
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, the
man
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male
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food
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 was a bit cold, mainly soup and pasta. I would like to do two things. The
first,
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obviously, is to please speak with you
kitchan
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kitchen
 stuff why they served a cold
food
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 on dirty plates.
Secondly
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, please close your restaurant for one day and retrain your whole kitchen stuff and your floor stuff as well. Yours faithfully,
lucas
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Lucas
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task achievement
Your introduction is clear, but check for spelling mistakes like 'lette' (should be 'letter'). Make sure to provide a clear explanation for each point raised in the feedback.
coherence and cohesion
Try to group related ideas within the same paragraph. For instance, combine details about the food issues together for better clarity and flow.
coherence and cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structure to enhance the writing flow. It will make the letter more engaging.
task achievement
You have effectively communicated your appreciation for the hotel's facilities, which shows a balanced review.
task achievement
Your feedback about the food service is specific, which helps in understanding the participants' issues.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Compliments
  • Ambiance
  • Professionalism
  • Hospitality
  • Quality
  • Variety
  • Freshness
  • Catering
  • Menu options
  • Dietary requirements
  • Feedback
  • Survey
  • Collaboration
  • Improvements
  • Rectify
  • Gastronomy
  • Culinary
  • Hospitality industry
  • Client satisfaction
  • Constructive criticism
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