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*Question* You wanted to buy a book from a book store but could not find the book in your city. You want to know if you can get it from the same book store in another city. Write a letter to the manager of the book store. * Explainthe details of the book * Why you need the book * How you would pay for it

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Dear Sir, The purpose of writing is to get
an information
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 regarding a
book
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 which is not available at bookstores in our city. I am looking for that particular
book
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 from
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last
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the last
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 two weeks. But, even after searching
on
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in
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 many stores, I was unable to
find
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find it
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. The
book
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 I am looking for is "The Conflict Management"- Fifth
Edition
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. It would be a great help if you please get it for me from
the
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another city
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Due to
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classes
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 I am unable to go out of town. I need
this
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book
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 because I am a student of
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the Police
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 Foundations course and in one of our courses we have to use that particular
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. The lessons are from
fifth
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edition
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also
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, there is
a
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new content added. So, I urgently need that
edition
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. If you would arrange it for me, I will be very thankful to you. I shall pay you the amount through e-transfer or PayPal. If you have any
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, you can contact me at 4379836652. Hoping for your consideration and hearing from you soon Yours Faithfully, XYZ

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coherence and cohesion
Consider providing a more formal opening line, rather than "The purpose of writing is to get an information". For instance, you could say, "I am writing to inquire about a specific book." This will enhance the formal tone of your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Clarify the last sentence of the first paragraph by rephrasing it slightly; for example, you might say, "I would sincerely appreciate your assistance in obtaining this book from your location." This will improve clarity.
task achievement
Make sure to use complete sentences throughout and double-check for grammatical errors, such as 'another city' instead of 'the another city'. These small errors can impact the overall impression.
task achievement
Your letter has a clear structure and covers all the required points effectively.
task achievement
You communicated your urgency and the reason for needing the book clearly, making it easy for the reader to understand your situation.
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