The tabe below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The table gives information that the Australian
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40-44
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old are the mother of how many
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in four different
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(1981, 1986, 1996 and 2006).
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with three or more
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made up less relevant percentages in recent
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and recorded a considerable decrease rather
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previous
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.
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, the proportion of
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with two
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and less increased.
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with four or more
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recorded the lowest proportion in 2006, accounting for 11%
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is showed around
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% decrease,
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to 1981.
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with three
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demonestrated
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the same decreasing trend and made up 21.5% in 2006 with a 6% decrease
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to 1981.
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three groups illustrated an increasing trend.
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with two
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made up around 38% in 2006 with
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% increase.
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with one child and
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without any
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doubled roughly and accounted for around 13% and 16% in 2006.

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Include a brief introduction that paraphrases the task and clearly outlines the main trends in the data.
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Provide more specific figures and comparisons in terms of percentage changes to support your main points more effectively.
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The essay contains a clear overall summary of trends observed in the data.
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The essay makes an attempt to compare different time periods effectively.

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