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Band 4.5

Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you got off the plane, you left a bag there. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter explain what has happened describe the bag and its contents say what you would like them to do about this problem

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
due to
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 the
bag
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 I
have
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apply
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forgget
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forget
 in your aircraft ,In 26th of May I was travelling from Jeddah to London
flight
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on flight
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 number 33Hg ,After I arrived
in
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at
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 the airport and after I
finshed
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finished
 my
immagration
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immigration
procces
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process
 I noticed that I
forgget
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forget
forgot
 my
bag
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 in the
aircarft
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aircraft
 but,
unfortunatlly
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unfortunately
 I could not
came
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come
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 back again to bring it because I already
singed
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signed
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 in
in
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apply
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UK
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the UK
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 ,
However
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, I explained to the supervisor my issue and he said to me that I need to apply a request on the airways email .
In addition
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 ,My seat number was 5A and my carry-on
is
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was
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 a fully black
backbag
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back bag
 with
small
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a small
the small
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 blue magnet in the front . I
kindley
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kindly
 request
to
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you to
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 bring back my
bag
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 and provide me
a
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with a
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procces
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process
 of
retrivng
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retrieving
 my
bag
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 on
this
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 email .and I really hope to take my demand into
considration
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consideration
 .and I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully Abdullah Alqahtani

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task achievement
Your letter contains the necessary information, but be mindful of grammatical errors and spelling mistakes, as they may affect clarity. Try to proofread your letter before sending it.
coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your ideas more clearly with distinct paragraphs. For example, one paragraph could focus on explaining the situation, while another describes the bag and its contents. This will improve the overall coherence of your letter.
greeting and closing
You addressed the recipient appropriately and signed off in a formal manner, which is suitable for this type of communication.
complete response
You clearly explained the issue you faced and provided specific details about your flight and the bag, which is essential in making your request clear.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unfortunate incident
  • Flight details
  • Distraction
  • Valuable possessions
  • Sentimental value
  • Lost and found procedure
  • Safe return
  • Compensation
  • Assistance
  • Gratitude
  • Follow-up
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