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The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparasions where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparasions where relevant.
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The line chart provides key information about the figure of
books
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 read in the library by both genders at Starmouth School from 2006 till 2012.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the boys read mostly the double number of
books
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 mostly 50
books
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comparing
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compared
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 with the girls who read approximately 25
books
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in
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at
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 the beginning of the year.
Whereas
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, the opposite accrued in 20012 because the females reached the higher sum of paperback in relation to males.
According to
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 what is shown ,the
amount
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 of
books
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 for both students increased gradually
from
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between
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 2009 and 2010 .
In addition
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, the value of reading papers for all people
rised
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rose
raised
rise
 sharply after 2010 ,until they reached the same point in 2011.
On the other hand
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,
dramatic
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a dramatic
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decreased
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happen
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 in males ,
while
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 the females increased rapidly in the period from 2011-2012.
To sum up
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, we could say that, all students in the school read 100
books
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 in 2011.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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