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nnovation is often driven by the pursuit of profit and economic growth. However, some argue that it should prioritize addressing social and environmental issues. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

In modern society, saving
money
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 is becoming more and more important. Some
people
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 think that even young
people
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 should save for their
future
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. I agree that everyone, including young
people
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, should learn to save for their
future
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.
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 habit can help them become more independent and avoid financial problems later in life. First of all, when young
people
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 start saving
money
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 early, they learn how to manage their finances better.
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 can help them when they need to pay for education, health care, or buy a house in the
future
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. Many teenagers spend
money
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 on unnecessary things like clothes or gadgets, but they should
also
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 think about the
future
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. As the saying goes,
money
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 doesn’t grow on trees, which means
people
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 must work hard for it and not waste it.
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, saving
money
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 helps humanity prepare for unexpected situations.
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, if someone loses their job or has a medical emergency, having some savings can reduce stress and give them time to solve the problem. Young
people
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 who learn to save early will feel more secure and confident in life. In conclusion, I believe that saving
money
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 is a very important skill for everyone, especially the youth. It teaches responsibility and gives
people
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 more control over their
future
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. With good
money
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 habits,
young
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 generation can avoid many difficulties and live more comfortably as adults.

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Task Achievement
Consider including a counterargument section to fully address the topic of prioritizing social and environmental issues alongside the financial aspect of saving.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use more varied linking words to improve the flow of your ideas and create more coherence between sentences and paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Expand on your main points with more specific examples or data related to the impact of saving money and its long-term benefits.
Task Achievement
The essay presents a clear viewpoint on the importance of saving money for young people, which is well stated in the introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay structure is logical, with clear paragraphs each focusing on a distinct idea related to saving money.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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