The chart below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The chart below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
There I can see
pie
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a pie
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chart in the list. it is linked
withlocation
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with location
with-location
ofclasses
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of classes
classes
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of
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24% School galls, 10% college-based studios, 18% community halls 48% private studios. There are types of
dance
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classes under the chart. White color is for
kids
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under 11 years
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olds
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old
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however
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the black line is for children
whom
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who
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age
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are
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upper
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older
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than 11 spacial 16
yers
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years old
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olds
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.There the majority under 11 years
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olds
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old
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people love
Ballet
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than
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teenager
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teenagers
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.
Kids
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are keen on the Tap
abit
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a bit
more than
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teenager
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teenagers
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.
Last
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but not least modern
danses
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dance
is danced by
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teenager
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teenagers
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. their
nomber
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number
of more than 500.For
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instance
inctance
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inctance,
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600
kids
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is
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are
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interested in
Ballet
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.Tap young dancers are organized
that
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in that
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they are more than 400.
there
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are
rether
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really
few
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fewer
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modern dancers than
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teenager
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teenagers
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they
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there
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are just 300
kids
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in the modern
dancer
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dancing
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class. If I say about
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teenager
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teenagers
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, that the majority
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pupils
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of pupils
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use modern
dance
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rather than other.
They
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There
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are more than 500
pupils
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.when I
tell
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talk
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abaut
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about
Ballet
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, older
pupils
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use a little
than
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more than
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kids
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.In Tap
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dance
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dance,
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they
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there
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are a bit less than under 11 years
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olds
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old
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pupils
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.There are maximum
pupils
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are 600
pupils
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who join in
ballet
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. on the other
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hand
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hands
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hands,
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the
last
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of
pupils
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entered the modern
dance
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class, and all of them are
Australia
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from Australia
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, kids, olds, ballet, teenager, pupils with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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