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The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The three pie graphs illustrate the average proportion of
sodium
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, saturated fat, and sugar in everyday meals.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 these nutrients can cause health issues if consumed
on
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 high concentration.
Moreover
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, a specific amount of each substance is essential which is lower in the morning meal and higher in dinner.
However
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, additional sugar is highly added in snacks as compared to other foods.
According to
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 the data, in breakfast, there should be 14% of
sodium
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 and 16% of both other
nutritions
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nutrients
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 (fat and sweetener). After that,
in
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 lunch, people eat meals that contain 29% of
sodium
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, 26% of saturated fat, and less than 20% (19%) of artificial sweetener.
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, the concentration of
sodium
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 in snacks is as same as in morning feed and almost 20% of the nutrients are fatty acids
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 the ratio of added sugar is comparatively high in refreshments which is 42%.
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, the highest ratio is represented in supper which is 43% of
sodium
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, 37% of fatty acid, and the remaining percentage is of sweetener.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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