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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

It is true that many people are drawn towards utilizing solar panels as a source of clean
energy
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 for their household.
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 it offers a plethora of benefits, it is
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 accompanied by some drawbacks. On one hand, it is a well-known fact that installing panels in order to harvest solar
energy
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, provides a never-ending and infinite source of power, which could be stored in
electical
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electrical
 form and
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 utilized for powering lights and other electronic devices, or as heat for warming up the place. Not only is it renewable, but it is
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 clean, meaning that no harmful gas is emitted in the process.
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 can help families contribute to saving the ecosystem
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 reducing their carbon footprint.
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,
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 system will eventually
pay_back
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pay back
 for its initial expenses, the starting fee is rather high and costly.
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 may repel many individuals who are interested in taking part in slowing down
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climate
 change
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 but cannot afford
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 these panels.
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, governments should play a crucial role in facilitating the widespread employment of clean
energy
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 sources,
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 can be achieved by subsidizing these alternative methods.
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, there is a maintenance issue as well, solar
energy
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’s gears and devices require frequent cleaning and service,
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 they could be damaged and lose their function. In conclusion, I would argue that solar
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 as an eco-friendly replacement for domestic use offers so many potentials,
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, it should be supported by the government financially, so that more people can take advantage of it.

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples or data to support your points, particularly regarding the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy. This could strengthen your argument and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your main points are thoroughly developed to improve clarity and comprehension. Each point could benefit from more detailed explanations or examples.
coherence and cohesion
Check for minor typographical errors (e.g., 'electical' should be 'electrical', 'pay_back' should be 'pay back', 'cliamte' should be 'climate'). These errors can distract from the overall quality of your writing even though they don’t significantly affect meaning.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with a defined introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps to guide the reader through your ideas.
task achievement
You have presented both advantages and disadvantages of solar energy in a balanced manner, which demonstrates an understanding of the complexities of the topic.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable energy
  • Subsidies
  • Tax credits
  • Photovoltaic cells
  • Efficiency
  • Off-grid
  • Carbon footprint
  • Climate change
  • Initial investment
  • Energy security
  • Sustainability
  • Decarbonization
  • Grid parity
  • Feed-in tariff
  • Energy storage systems
  • Payback period
  • Net metering
  • Silicon panels
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