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The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The two diagrams
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the difference in the effects of rainfall in the forest and in cities.
Overall
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, it can be seen that less
water
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 returns to the atmosphere and the
water
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 table
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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in urban areas compared to those in natural spaces,
while
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 more
water
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 ends up as polluted runoff or causes the land to erode before the process starts. In forest
area
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areas
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, it can be seen that
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water
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the water
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 table is sufficient
this
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 is mainly because of the absorption of rain droplets by the trees on the permissible
top soil
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topsoil
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,
then
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water
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 is absorbed by the less permissible subsoil on the rock where infiltration takes place which
as a result
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 increases
water
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 baseflow. In cities, it can be seen that because of lack of
cultivation
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cultivation,
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 the precipitated
water
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 can not be stored,
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water
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and water
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 ends up
at
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in
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 polluted
water
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 because of decreased evaporation and transpiration.
As a result
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, erosion of land takes place which eventually leads to reduced baseflow.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as a result".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Precipitation
  • Absorption
  • Groundwater recharge
  • Evapotranspiration
  • Surface runoff
  • Impervious surfaces
  • Concrete
  • Asphalt
  • Stormwater systems
  • Vegetation
  • Water vapor
  • Local climate conditions
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