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he chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019

he chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019
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hours
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speading
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spent on
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 leaisure activities on a trip
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world
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regionus
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regions
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in August 2019.
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tourists
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approxomately
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approximately
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hightes
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highest
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at
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beach
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beaches
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world
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seacond
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second
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place
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places
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 in the regions accounted
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for the
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 smallest
protion
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proportion
. Chinese had a journey free time
activites
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activities
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bigest
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houres
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hours
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 in 2019,triple that of American
tourists
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houres
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considerd
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considered
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secand
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second
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tourists
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 and Brazilian
tourists
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realing
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realising
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hours
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at the beach
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chinese
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tourists
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hours
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protion
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portion
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samller
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smaller
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world
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of
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tourists
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 consider
siginficant
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significant
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hours
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Visting
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Visiting
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 places in
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chinese
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China
tourists
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 the minimal
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amount
amout
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amount
 of
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activities
activity
activites
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activities
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world
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 it is
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nearly
neary
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nearly
 one
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hour
houre
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hour
,
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whereas
wheras
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whereas
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American
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America
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tourist
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touriest
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the touriest
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 and and Turkish
tourists
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 and Brazilian
tourists
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equviater
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equator
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, world, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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