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The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred.

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred.
The two
piecharts
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pie charts
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 represent the
usage
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 of energy in the United States in a span of ten years starting
on
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in
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 1980.
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 the given information showed that Oil was used as
font
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the font
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 of
power
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was
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primarly
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primarily
primary
 despite the
decreasement
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decrease
if
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in
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 its
usage
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 in that decade,
while
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 an
increasement
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increase
of
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in
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power
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 is indicated in the same period of time. In the first chart the
usage
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 of Oil as
source
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a source
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 of
power
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 was 42% and in the second one declined to 33%, in the same
way
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 natural gas adoption lost only
for
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1% starting from 26%.
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 the graphs illustrated an
increasement
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increment
of
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in
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usage
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the usage
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 of Coal,
that
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which
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 was 22% in 1980 and arrived
to
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at
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 27% in 1990,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 the utilization of nuclear energy in
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the
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USA at the beginning was 5% and doubled after
thr
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the
 considered period of time. Only
power
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 obtained by water remained constant with a value of 5% of all used energy.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, power with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sources of energy
  • predominant
  • renewables
  • nuclear
  • significant increases
  • significant decreases
  • technological advancements
  • policy changes
  • trends
  • overall
  • preference
  • shifts
  • implications
  • future energy landscape
  • decades
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