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The pie charts below show the number of native speakers of different languages in Canada in 1996,2006 and 2016. Summatise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

The pie charts below show the number of native speakers of different languages in Canada in 1996,2006 and 2016. Summatise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
The given charts demonstrate how the proportion of different native speakers in Canada had changed over the 10-year period.
English
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, Chinese, Urdu and other languages ​​are included.
Overall
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,
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 being the original language remained the vast majority among Canadian citizens during the given period.
However
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, the number of people speaking
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 originally had markedly decreased by 1990. In detail, in 1980 native
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 speakers made up 70% of the population. The Urdu language ranked second place having 15% of informants,
while
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 Chinese and the others comprised only 11% and 6% respectively. If we look at the second chart, by 1990 the number of Urdy speakers had markedly grown
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 28% so that it had led to depression
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 the
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 portion.
Although
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 the part of
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 natives declined, they remained the majority comprising 55%.
In addition
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, the Chinese share increased slightly up to 11%
instead
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 of 9% in 1980,
while
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 the portion of the other languages remained stable making up 6%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words english with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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