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Band 5

Your colleague recently got a new job at another company. Write a letter to her, in your letter: Express how you feel about her departure Say what you enjoyed the most while you were working together Ask about her future plans

Dear Isha, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in
a
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apply
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good health and wealth,give my regards to your parents I am writing
this
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 letter to congratulate
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you for
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for
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on
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 your new job I am very happy for you to get different work at another company with
high
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a high
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 position from
you
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where you
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 were previously working in
this
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 company.
However
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,I
am missing
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miss
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 all those days which we
spend
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spent
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 together as
a
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the
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 best colleagues ,I just remember how we
sit
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sat
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in
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at
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computer
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the computer
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 and
help
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helped
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 each
others
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other
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 to complete
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the task
a task
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task
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tasks
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 and all
assignments
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our assignments
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 before the deadlines .
while
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 completing our project we had lots of gossip and lots of coffee with a long day and after
all
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all,
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 we achieved all success together.
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,my most enjoyable part with you is when we go out for
team work
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teamwork
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 and we spend
whole
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the whole
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 day together for the first time that was
most
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the most
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 memorable day for me. Among all,I am
little
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a little
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 bit concerned about your future plans if you don't mind I just wanted to ask you how you can manage all your dreams in
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 competition
as well as
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 you have to look after your
old
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older
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 parents ,if possible please explain me how is your new job what kind of work you have to do and how is your new colleagues . Looking forward
for
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to
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 your response and
very
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am very
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 excited to know about your new job Thanking you Ami

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more clearly by separating them into distinct paragraphs, each covering one main point.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to maintain proper punctuation and grammar for a smoother reading experience.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid overly long sentences which may confuse the reader. Shorter sentences can help convey your message clearly.
task achievement
While your tone is warm and friendly, ensure that your letter remains formal given the context of a professional relationship.
task achievement
Your warm congratulations express genuine happiness for your colleague's new job, which is a lovely touch.
task achievement
The personal anecdotes you included about your time together add a heartfelt element to your letter, making it memorable.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • departure
  • bittersweet
  • insightful
  • collaborative
  • fond memories
  • professional bond
  • success
  • aspirations
  • encouragement
  • career milestones
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