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Writing Samples
Band 4

You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter •explain why you have moved •describe the new house •invite your friend to come and visit

Dear John, I am writing
you
Change preposition
to you
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 to give you
two
Correct determiner usage
some
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 good news
firstly
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, I have moved to
london
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London
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.
Secondly
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, I relocated for a job
of
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as
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Correct article usage
a
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Project manager at Aceme Enterprise.
This
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 was my dream job and I longed for
this
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 position.
finally
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, my hard work paid off. I have rented
an
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a
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 studio
apartmnet
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apartment
apartments
 in Central London, where my company is located. I wanted to reside near
to
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apply
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my company to reduce commute time. The house is modern,
recently
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and recently
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 constructed with updated amenities and features.
Moreover
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, the view from my apartment is surreal. I am so excited to give you a tour of my house, and
also
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 can't wait to meet you I have lots to talk about.
Lets
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Let's
Let us
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 catch up, We can meet at my house and play video games. Let me know if
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the upcomming
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upcomming
Correct your spelling
upcoming
 weekend works
for
Correct pronoun usage
for you
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. Best, John

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow of the letter by ensuring each paragraph follows a clear structure and transitions smoothly from one idea to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your greetings and closing statements have correct punctuation and structure (e.g. ‘Dear John,’ instead of ‘Dear John,’ and ‘Let me know if the upcoming weekend works for you.’).
task achievement
Include a bit more detail about the job role and why it is your dream job to provide a fuller response to the task. This will enhance your task achievement score.
task achievement
Consider using more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to demonstrate a richer language use, which can improve your overall tone.
task achievement
You effectively communicated the reasons for your move and your excitement about the job, which adds a personal touch to the letter.
task achievement
You successfully invited your friend to visit and included a suggestion for what to do, which was engaging.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • relocate
  • spacious
  • modern
  • residential area
  • homely
  • amenities
  • downsize
  • commute
  • scenic
  • landmarks
  • nostalgic
  • convivial gathering
  • housewarming
  • cozy
  • landscaped garden
  • architectural design
  • bustling neighborhood
  • serene environment
  • up-and-coming area
  • expansive view
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