These days more and more people are going to other countries for a period either to find a job or study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this , but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, the tendency
of migrating
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to other
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due to
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reasons
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as education or occupation remarkably rises
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and brings a lot of upsides . At the same time,
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causes several troubles for locals of foreign areas,
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,
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a main topic of debate today.
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essay will outline both
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the benefits
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and drawbacks of living abroad for certain purposes and will exemplify it with personal experience.
On the other hand
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, migration provides numerous benefits for
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through material payments that students and workers
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to use local facilities and services. Students of universities pay for their education and work there to create a comfortable environment,
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employees work for
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and increase the economics of the country through paying taxes for it. All those actions
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not only the economic state of the area
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but
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causes
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globalization and spreading of the cultures
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the world.
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, in South
Korea
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Korea,
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there are a lot of students and workers who
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from developing
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to get better
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and
qualification
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qualifications
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. And
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doing their job they
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promote
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culture through social media and advertise the region as a great place either to spend time travelling or earning some money.
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, the majority of
countries
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do not provide
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attention to their
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working on
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the nation’s
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promotion.
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, locals of those places might have smaller chances to get a workplace than foreigners, because some local companies invite migrants just to get a better status among others.
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, in some developing
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in Central Asia, schools might accept foreign teachers in study places just to get a higher place among other centres, without looking at the level of qualification of the teacher.
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,
salaries
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of those usually are much higher than those of
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themselves, which
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controversial opinions in society regarding
policy
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the policy
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of the country. In summary,
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people can create a positive environment for themselves and for the country’s economy
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moving there, they
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can replace
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and leave them without occupation or qualification.
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,
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tendency
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both upsides and downsides for the government and
citizens
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of the country.

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task achievement
Strengthen the introduction by clearly stating your view on the balance of advantages and disadvantages. This helps in framing your discussion.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph flows logically to the next. Consider using more linking words or phrases to guide the reader through your arguments.
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Provide more specific examples or personal anecdotes that illustrate your points in the conclusion. This will enhance the depth of your argument.
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You have identified both advantages and disadvantages clearly, which shows a balanced perspective on the issue.
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The essay contains relevant ideas about the economic impact of migrant workers and students, which is an important aspect of the discussion.

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