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The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
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the two piecharts represent the
usage
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 of different types of source
energy
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 in the USA during a
decade
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 starting
at
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 1980.
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 the adoption of nuclear
power
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 decreased in that span of time, though maintained the state of principal
energy
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 source. The other kinds of
energy
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 remained the same or increased the
usage
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. the
usage
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 of nuclear
power
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dreased
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decreased
 from 42% to 33% in a
decade
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, in the same direction
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natural gas passed with a little diminution from 26% to 25%.
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hand
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 different fonts of
power
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 increase the
usage
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, in that way
USA
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the USA
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 decided to increase the
usage
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 of coal from
a
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22% to
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27%, and
also
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 the
usage
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 of Oil doubled in a
decade
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 starting from
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5% . Only
energy
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 obtained by water remained the same in that period of time with a value of 5%, so its
usage
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 was constant
in
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for
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 a
decade
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instead
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the
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of the
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 other fonts of
power
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, energy, decade, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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