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Writing Samples
Band 3

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given map shows the differences between a specific part of an
airport
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 now and one year later after some redevelopment.
Overall
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, the structure of
this
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 part of the
airport
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 is going to be the same. The main change will be in the increase of
gates
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 that
in
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apply
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this
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airport
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are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 going to
construct
Wrong verb form
be constructed
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.
Firstly
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,
in
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on
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 the south side of
this
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airport
Add a comma
airport,
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 they have two rooms, one for departures and
other
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the other
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 for arrivals. Specifically, in
departures
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the departures
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 room now there
are
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is
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 a café and
check-in
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a check-in
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 point but, in the future, these two things are going to
be relocate
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be relocated
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 and a bag drop point
are
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is
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 going to
be construct
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be constructed
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. On the other side, in the arrivals room are going to have a new café, ATM and car hire point.
Secondly
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, security passport control and passport control customs are going to be in the same places and only new shops are going to be
in
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on
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 the left side
of
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apply
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before
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the security’s
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security’s
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security
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 room.
On the contrary
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, we will expect a lot of changes in the
north
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northern
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 part of
this
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airport
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, the number of
gates
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are
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is
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 going to increase
to
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from
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 8 to 18, because they are going to make 10 new
gates
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 in the
airport
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.
In addition
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, a new sky train is going to replace the old walkway to connect
gates
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 1 and 18 to 9 to 10.

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Task Achievement
Try to provide a clearer overview or summary of the main changes in the airport design. This can help set the stage for your main points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that comparisons between the current and future layouts are explicit. This can help enhance the clarity of your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use more variety in your sentence structures and vocabulary to increase engagement and clarity.
Task Achievement
The essay identifies the main changes in the airport layout which shows a clear understanding of the task.
Task Achievement
The essay covers both the departure and arrival areas, showing attention to detail in the description of changes.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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