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The table below gives information about the average annual distance travelled by adults and the types of travel in 1977 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the average annual distance travelled by adults and the types of travel in 1977 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the differences
of
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in
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average
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the average
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 distance people
traveling
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travelled
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 in one
year
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 by various modes of transportation in 1977 and 2007. The figure is given in miles.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
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car
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the car
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 was the most vehicle people used to travel in both
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year
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years
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.
Car
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, train, and
taxi
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taxis
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 gained more popularity in 2007 compared to
that
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apply
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in
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apply
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1977,
whereas
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less
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fewer
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 people chose to travel by walking, bicycle, motorcycle,
and
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or
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 bus in 2007. In 1977, Individuals
prefer
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preferred
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 travelling by
car
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 the most,
following
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followed
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 by train and bus, accounting for 3500, 900, and 800 miles per
year
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respectivel
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respectively
.
While
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 and
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 were used for the least distances at 100 miles per
year
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. In 2007,
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Car
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Cars
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,
train
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trains
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, and
taxi
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taxis
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 saw an
incresing
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increasing
 trend. The
amout
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amount
 of distance that
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car
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cars
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 were used was double compared to that of 1977.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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