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Band 2.5

Many companies and organisations require their employees to wear uniform. What kind of jobs require uniforms? What are the disadvantages of wearing uniform to work?

A lot of jobs are letting their workers wear formal clothes in some kind of job. So , because of
this
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 happening, there are many benefits and drawbacks
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 wearing uniforms. Some people believe that wearing uniforms at work
offers
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 workers to do their tasks in a better way and they will not feel different
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 others. They will focus more on their job because they will not have to think of what will
will
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they wear at work every day .
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, the employee could wake up any time he wants without thinking about what he wants to wear that will let them have all their attention for the task and with that happening they will

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task achievement
Ensure that all main points are clearly developed and supported with specific examples.
coherence and cohesion
Work on creating smoother transitions between ideas to improve the flow of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Try to provide a clearer conclusion to summarize your ideas effectively.
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You have made a strong start by introducing the topic of uniforms and presenting both advantages and disadvantages.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cohesive appearance
  • Professionalism
  • Hygiene
  • Identification
  • Authority
  • Standardized look
  • Safety
  • Individuality
  • Personal expression
  • Discomfort
  • Impractical
  • Costly
  • Maintenance
  • Job dissatisfaction
  • Autonomy
  • Freedom
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