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Some people belive that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is
widely
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a widely
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 debated topic among individuals
that
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apply
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whether doing studies at university or getting into
job
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a job
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 right after school is the best option for a successful career. Some argue studying at university allows access to more opportunities;
while
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 others believe that doing
job
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a job
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 after
schools
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school
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 provides more
hands on
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 experience to grow.
However
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,
according to
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 my point of
view
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view,
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 former opinion would be more
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beneficial
benefical
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beneficial
 for having a
well established
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 career

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task achievement
Consider expanding your introduction to clearly present both sides of the argument before stating your opinion. This enhances clarity and engagement.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph discusses one clear idea and uses adequate linking words for flow (e.g., 'firstly', 'in contrast', 'furthermore').
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Provide specific examples to support your points, making them more relevant and compelling.
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Your essay presents a clear viewpoint, establishing a position on the topic, which is a strong aspect of task response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • higher education
  • employability
  • networking opportunities
  • internships
  • earning potential
  • practical experience
  • academic qualifications
  • skills and experience
  • work ethic
  • vocational training
  • successful careers
  • traditional academic environments
  • entrepreneurship
  • real-world work settings
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