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The two floor plans show the renovation of AAA Accountancy's main office. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. image1

Presented for consideration are two floorplans, relating to changes which are likely to take place at an accountancy main
office
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.
Overall
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, the accountancy
office
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 is expected to add more facilities and commercial buildings
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 it is noticeable that there are four rooms that tend to be merged to do
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In addition
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, the reception area is planned to be redeveloped. In the eastern part of the blueprint, there are lunch rooms, meeting rooms and manager's offices which are set to remain after the redevelopment. In regards to the western, the reception area will be reconstructed with a new desk and furniture,
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 the storage room relocated to the upper corner. Turning to the central part of the plan, the accounts
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, processing
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, new customers
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 and payroll
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 are going to be united into a huge room that has three groups of desks, and an area for copiers and fax machines in the left corner. Concurrently, in the lower part, the sofa is going to be added for sitting.

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task achievement
Your introduction is clear, but you could enhance it by briefly stating the main changes that take place after the renovations. Additionally, a concluding sentence summarizing the overall changes would strengthen your response.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use cohesive devices (e.g., linking words) between sentences and paragraphs to improve the flow of your writing. This can help the reader to follow your ideas more clearly.
task achievement
Try to be more specific with the locations of changes. For example, clarify where the 'new customers office' will be located in relation to other rooms to provide a better visual of the layout.
task achievement
You've successfully outlined the main changes in the office layout, which shows an understanding of the floor plans presented.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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