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You recently spent a night in a hotel and had to put up with a great deal of noise very early in the morning because of faulty central heating system.The manager promised to contact you regarding compensation but you still haven't heard from him. Write a letter to the hotel.in the letter Describe the problem at the hotel Explain what the manager had said at the time Say what you want the manager to do

Dear sir, I am writing
this
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 letter just to remind you
the
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of the
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 problem I faced during my stay in your hotel Recently I
spend
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 a night in your hotel .The
ambiance
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 of the hotel was good
that
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and
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 I
got
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 attracted
and
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to and
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also
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 appreciated
for
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your hospitality.
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while
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,during my current stay I suffered a noise problem very early in the morning,which was coming from the room heating system .
On
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 that particular
time
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 I
try
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tried
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 to reach out
room
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to room
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 service but they
are
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 irresponsible and could not attend
me
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to me
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 in the early hours so I turned off
heater
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the heater
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 and slept in a cool bed.
However
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,I
explain
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 my
inconveniences
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 to the manager during my check-out
so
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 he promised
me
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apply
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to contact back regarding all compensation but
it's
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it has
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 already a month pass for
this
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 incident and
manager
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the manager
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did
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has
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 not
call
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 me back.so, now I want all my money back
instead
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 of compensation. Looking forward to hear from you as soon as possible Thanking you Ami shah

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greeting and closing
Make sure to include a proper salutation like 'Dear [Manager's Name]' for a more personal touch.
coherence
Try to organize your ideas clearly by ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single idea and expands on it. For example, dedicate one paragraph to describing the noise issue and another to discussing your interaction with the manager.
task achievement
Consider softening your request for a full refund by expressing your understanding that the hotel may have policies in place, thus maintaining a more diplomatic tone.
task achievement
Your letter has a clear intention and adequately addresses the problem faced during your stay.
task achievement
You express appreciation for the hotel's ambiance and hospitality, which adds a positive note to your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • faulty
  • central heating system
  • excessive noise
  • discomfort
  • frustration
  • lack of rest
  • promise
  • follow up
  • compensation
  • communication
  • customer service
  • refund
  • discount
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