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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
The line graph demonstrates the number of exports from Australia to 4 different countries, Japan, the US,
China
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, and India between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
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China
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 ranked
at
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the
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first place at taking exports from Australia meanwhile, India ended up at
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. In detail, the figures of
China
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 and India stood at nearly
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 level with well below 10 % of the total export of Australia in 1990
however
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,
China
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 marked a significant increase,
then
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 rose sharply between 2005 and 2010.
Moreover
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, Japan started the
period
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 with the highest amount of export level among other countries between 20 and 30 %,
then
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 started to decrease noticeably
just
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 below 20 % over the 32-
years
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year
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period
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.
US
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The US
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 had just below 10 % share in Australian
export
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exports
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 at the start of
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period
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the period
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 and reached its highest amount between 1995 and 2002,
then
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 saw a noticeable decrease until the end of the
period
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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