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Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen or pencil. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?(Anelya1)

Nowadays many people write by
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 less and less, using a pen or pencil.
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reason
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 issue is technological advancement and in my
opinion
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 I think it’s a positive development because it has more useful features. One of the main
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reason
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 reducing the number of people, who write manually, is
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 of technology development.
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 to say, in the technological century is convenient
write
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 on
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with
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using
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a keyboard
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, with
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reason
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 that it's much
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easier and individuals can correct their mistakes faster and without wasting time.
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, with the advent of modern
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 many humans feel
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 to write by
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 and it's the second
reason
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this
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 issue.
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Writing
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assessment institute
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 estimated that in Korea 60% of students write by using
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while
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 by
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. But despite
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 of useful features. One of
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this benefit
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these benefits
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 is that typing is
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 fast way
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 entering text. Another advantage of typing is that it allows
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someone else
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 the text without problems in handwriting.
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, many young citizens in America prefer typing with
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a keyboard
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that
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keyboarding
much
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 more comfortable. In conclusion, fewer people write by
hand
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 because of technological progress today and in my opinion, it’s a positive change for
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 that new technology has a lot of useful benefits.

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Your introduction clearly states the topic and your opinion, which is great! However, you might consider rephrasing the thesis statement for clarity. Instead of 'this issue is technological advancement,' you could say 'the main reason for this trend is the advancement of technology.'
coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to enhance clarity. For example, instead of starting with 'One of the main reasons...', you could directly mention how technology is influencing writing habits.
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While you provide some examples, they could be more specific and detailed to illustrate your points better. Consider adding more data or specific studies to support your argument about keyboard usage among students.
coherence and cohesion
In your conclusion, reiterate your main points more clearly. You may want to briefly summarize the positive aspects of technology's impact on writing habits instead of only stating it's a positive change.
task achievement
You presented a clear opinion in your introduction and supported it throughout the essay, which is very commendable. Your reasoning shows a thoughtful engagement with the topic.
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The comparisons made between handwriting and typing, especially in terms of speed and legibility, are insightful and relevant to the topic. This reflects good critical thinking.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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