IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

You are experiencing financial problems and want to ask your landlord if you can pay your rent late. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter explain: Why you cannot pay the rent When you will pay the rent. How you will ensure you can pay your rent in the future

Dear Mr Dmith, Hope you are doing awesome and everything
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 sunshine and rainbows around you. I am writing
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 letter to
request
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ask
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 if I can pay
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rent
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the rent
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of
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for
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this
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month
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 later next
month
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. I will tell you in detail, as you know I have been living in
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 apartment since I
have
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apply
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moved to Mississauga. I am living alone here and I came to Canada as
student
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a student
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. Before, I
was working
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worked
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in
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at
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Marriott
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the Marriott
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 Hotel and that
job
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 helped
alot
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a lot
for
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with
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 paying school fees,
rent
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 and other expenses.
From
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For
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last
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the last
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 two
months
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months,
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 I have
no
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had no
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job
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 and
reason
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the reason
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 behind
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 is I am preparing for COMT certification. If I
will
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apply
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pass
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 exam, in future I will get
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job
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a job
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 in
hospital
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a hospital
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. So,
for giving
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to give
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 my 100
percent
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per cent
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 to
studies
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my studies
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 I choose to stay at home rather than going to work. I am only requesting to delay
rent
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 for
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month
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, next
month
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 in starting I will pay
rent
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of
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for
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 two months.
Beacuse
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Because
 I already got
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job
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a job
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 offer from
company
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the company
a company
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 and now I only have to
give
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take
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 the exam. Hope you will understand my situation. Yours Sincerely, Sam

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coherence and cohesion
Try to structure your paragraphs clearly by focusing on one main idea in each paragraph. For example, you could have a separate paragraph dedicated to explaining your financial issue, another for the timeline of payments, and a third for your future plans.
task achievement
Ensure all parts of your task are addressed thoroughly. You mentioned your job offer, but it would be helpful to state exactly when you expect to be able to pay the rent.
tone
Your letter has a friendly tone, which is important when communicating with your landlord.
clarity
You provided a clear explanation of your current financial situation and the reason for your request, which helps in understanding your context.
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