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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table compares
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activities
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the activities
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 of the unemployed between genders in the UK
last
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 year. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, what stands out from the table is that housework, shopping, and job hunting were the most
prefered
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preferred
activities
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.
In addition
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,
men
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 were more active than women in outdoor
activites
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activities
. Moving to a more detailed analysis, the proportion of males and females in housework accounted for 19% and 49%, respectively in the morning,
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 that of the unemployed in shopping was less than 30% in both genders.
Men
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was
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were
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 more active than women in job hunting by 6%, with the latter comprising 16%. With regard to the same
activities
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 in the afternoon, housing ranked first among women at 21%, which was followed by shopping and visiting friends constituting 17% each,
although
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men
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prefered
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preferred
 less these
activities
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 (under 15%). The percentage of males and females was approximately the same in job hunting watching TV ranging between 12% and 14%. The figure for
men
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 in gardening was responsible for more than 10% in both morning and afternoon,
whereas
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 the
remain
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remaining
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activites
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activities
 were merely under one-tenth.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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