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The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.

The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.
The bar chart illustrates the total number of
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 spent on telephone calls in the UK across three categories—local fixed
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, national and international fixed
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, and mobile calls—between 1995 and 2002.
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, local fixed
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 calls were the most popular throughout the period, peaking around the middle before slightly declining. National and international fixed
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 calls showed a steady increase,
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 mobile calls,
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 the least used, experienced a sharp rise by the end of the period. In detail, local
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fixed-line
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line
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 calls started at around 72
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minutes
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 in 1995 and rose steadily to reach a peak of 90
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minutes
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 in 1999. After that, the figure declined slightly to about 72
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 again by 2002. National and international
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fixed-line
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line
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 calls began at just over 35
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minutes
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 and increased gradually each year, reaching about 60
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minutes
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 by the end of the period. Mobile phone usage,
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 starting at just 5
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minutes
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, grew dramatically—especially after 1999—reaching approximately 45
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minutes
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 in 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, line, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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