The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. four

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. four
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. four
the two pie charts provide information about the online shopping sales
retailsectors
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retail sectors
in Canada between 2005 and 2010.
overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
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apply
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online shopping sales
was fluctuated
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fluctuated
has fluctuated
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in
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over
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two years. in 2005
dfectroins
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electrons
and
appliance
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appliances
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and home
furnhings
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furnishings
was higher
precentage
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percentage
,
while
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in 2010 food and beverage and video games
show
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showed
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the
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apply
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growth. in 2005,
dfectroins
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defections
electrons
and
appliance
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appliances
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was
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were
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the most saleable with 35% and
this
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precentage
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percentage
decreased slightly to 30% in 2010,
while
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the lowest was video games in 2005 with 18% which increased considerably to 23% in 2010.
however
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, the
precentage
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percentage
of home
furnhings
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furnishings
declined sharply from 25% to 15% between 2005 and 2010,
whereas
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food and beverage rose dramatically
at
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from
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22% to 32% from 2005 to 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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