Young people are often influenced in their behaviors by others in the same age group. Some argue that peer pressure is important while others feel it has distinct disadvantages. Do the disadvantages of peer pressure outweigh the advantages? (Anelya1)

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point that can shape young individuals' behaviours

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that it has distinct drawbacks. The principal

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inspiration from others who in the same age, but the main downsides are lots of

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from parents.

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why, I think that the disadvantages of

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outweigh the well advantages. On the one hand, one of the main upsides

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that some teenagers can get inspiration from their peers.

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to say, age group pressure can motivate youngsters to achieve their goals and work hard to improve themselves in many aspects of their lives.

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looking at other teenagers, the youths can inspired to study hard, take part in school competitions and develop their skills.

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can have a certain lifestyle for their age and know what they should carry out.

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teachers from Harvard

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70% of teens

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to work hard

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when they have motivation as peer influence.

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, one of the primary downsides

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that teens become more demanding. It means that they start

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their parents

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as phones, clothes and

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want to be like

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teenagers,

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wealthy parents.

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, teenage social influence can

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the worst impact

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minors that they don'

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want to do something by themselves

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reach

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they prefer.

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, it makes them feel anxious, lazy and

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that teens can'

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easily get

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Oxford's research estimated that 87% of

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feel anxiety

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if they can'

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have something in

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way. In conclusion, I think that the weaknesses don'

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outweigh the strengths because the

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have a

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impact and motivation

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the disadvantages can lead to a lot of demands.