Some people believe that human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. While others believe that animals also have right on land. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The planet needs balance and stability for the endangered

animals

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. Not only the land has provided humanity with the food

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the

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are important for the environment and it is a responsibility the humans have with them.

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, we must safeguard the endangered

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;

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, the advance of technology invites us to steal the land of the

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and

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could be a problem for the balance of the ecosystems

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since the earth's planet must be sustainable for all the participants.

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Task Achievement

Try to expand your ideas with more detailed examples or explanations to support your points more effectively. For instance, mention a specific endangered species and why its conservation is critical.

Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure that your essay has a more defined introduction and conclusion, which clearly present the topic and summarize your stance at the end.

Coherence and Cohesion

Work on the logical flow of your ideas, connecting them with appropriate linking words to enhance the coherence between sentences and paragraphs.

Task Achievement

You express a clear opinion regarding the importance of balancing human needs with the needs of endangered animals, which is a good starting point for discussing both views.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

89 words

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