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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the value of
specific
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a specific
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 country`s exports in different categories between 2015 and 2016
also
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 it shows percentage changes in each category.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the highest percentage belonged to petroleum products.
On the other hand
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, the lowest was Texties compared to
other
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others
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 all products
were grew
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were grown
were growing
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 in that given
periods
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period
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excpet
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except
 germs and
jewellwery
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jewellery
.
Accorfing
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According
 to the data ,
Argicultureal
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Agricultural
 products were the only
categoriy
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category
had
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that had
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 the same
percantage
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percentage
 in two different years which had more than 40 billion dollars.
While
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 germs and jewellery had
approxmately
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approximately
 50 billion dollars.but it decreased by 5.18% between 2015 to 2016. The only product that had a
shrp
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sharp
shop
 rose was Textiles by almost 15.24%.
while
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,
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apply
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 engineered goods increased by 3%.
While
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 agricultural
product
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products
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 had 0.81$
increased
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increase
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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