You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English speaking friend. In your letter: • Explain why you changed jobs • Describe your new job • Tell him/her your other news

Dear Pam, Hope you doing awesome, everything's
sunhine
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sunny
and rainbows
in
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your side. I am writing
this
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letter to let you know that I have started
new
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job recently. Well, there are two specific reasons why I
quited
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quit
my previous work. As you know I belong to
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family and my family is dependent on my job. So,
from
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for
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long
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time I
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looking for work which can pay me better and more than the one I had before. Another reason is I
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am
planning to move to Burlington
city
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from Mississauga. Now, I will move In
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the TRI
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clinic, my position was front desk. In a
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clinic
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I am hired as an Ophthalmic assistant and they are paying me better than before. I am working with experienced Doctors who are eye specialists. I am working with them as
assistant
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an assistant
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. So, I have all the
responsiblities
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responsibilities
to perform eye exams
as well as
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managing
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front
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desk role.
Anyways
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, I am getting
next
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it next
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year. I know you will be surprised but you are the first one to whom I have
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shared
share
this
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news. Hope to see you soon. Best regards, Sam

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coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your ideas more clearly by using more structured paragraphs. Each paragraph should ideally focus on a single topic or idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to include a smooth transition between your thoughts, especially when moving from discussing your job change to your new job description.
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Pay attention to minor grammatical errors and typos, which can distract the reader and affect the overall presentation of your letter.
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You effectively conveyed your reasons for changing jobs which provides context to your friend.
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Your tone is friendly and engaging, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
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