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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the sources of funds and the pie charts depict the spending proportion of police
budget
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 in 2017 and 2018. The unit is measured in million
pounds
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 sterling for the table and percentages for the chart.
Overall
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, there was
increasing
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an increasing
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budget
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the budget
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 from 2017 to 2018,
which
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in which
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 the most of funds came from the national government,
while
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 the biggest usage of sources
is
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was
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 for salaries
which
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apply
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distributed to officers and staff. There was a small increase
for
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in
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 the
budget
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 that came from the national government, from 175.5m
pounds
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 in 2017 to 2018. There was a significant increase
for
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in
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 income from taxes, from 91.2m
pounds
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 to 102.3m.
Whereas
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, the other sources like grants relatively similar only added 0.5m
pounds
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 became 38.5m in 2018. In total, the
rose
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 of the
budget
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 was around 10m
pounds
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, from 304.7m to 318.6m
pounds
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.
On the other hand
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, the spending
for
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on
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 salaries, as the largest
expenses
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expense
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, decreased from 75% to 69%. The second biggest
expenses
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expense
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 was for buildings and transport which
remain
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remained
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 the same in both
year
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years
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. The least spending,
for
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on
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 technology, rose from 8% to 14%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, pounds, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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