IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-years-old students studying a foreign language in an english speaking country, and the top three foreign languages. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-years-old students studying a foreign language in an english speaking country, and the top three foreign languages. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features
The provided bar charts illustrate the percentage of young
students
Use synonyms
 aged 14 to 16 who studied three foreign languages — French, German, and Spanish — in an English-speaking country between 1984 and 2007.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
although
Linking Words
 the proportion of
students
Use synonyms
 learning French declined over the years, it remained the most popular
language
Use synonyms
 among the three.
Additionally
Linking Words
, the percentage of girls studying a foreign
language
Use synonyms
 was consistently higher than that of boys throughout the period. Looking at the details, around one-third of boys participated in foreign
language
Use synonyms
 learning during the given years, with a slight drop observed in 2007. In comparison, nearly 50% of girls studied a foreign
language
Use synonyms
 in 1984, though
this
Linking Words
 figure decreased by about 10% by 2007.
Furthermore
Linking Words
,
while
Linking Words
 all three languages saw a decline in student numbers over the period, French continued to dominate. In 1984, approximately half of the
students
Use synonyms
 chose to study French, but
this
Linking Words
 figure dropped to around 25% by 2007.
In contrast
Linking Words
, both German and Spanish remained less popular, with fewer than 20% of
students
Use synonyms
 opting for them in both years.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, language with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: