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You have received uniforms in your company that have to be worn by all employees. You are not satisfied with the uniform because it has some problems. Write a letter to your manager and in your letter consider the following points; Mention to positive points of the uniform. Clarify the problem that you have with the uniform. Suggest a solution for above mentioned problem.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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informed
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 you
about
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 the uniforms were compulsory to be worn by all employees. The uniforms were very important to wear in the office
,
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 because it creates a sense of unity among employees. It feels
comforts
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 during
the
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working hours and
sense
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 of professionalism. The problems observed with the uniform include specific concerns like fit issues, fabric quality, and logo
at
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on
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 the right side of shirts. These problems
affects
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 our working environment because
due to
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 fit
issue
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issues
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, women
employee
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employees
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 feel uncomfortable in front of
men
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manager
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managers
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 and colleagues. The solutions for these questions were like allowing employees to provide feedback on sizing and comfort, implementing
a
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 wear-test phase before finalizing the uniforms or exploring alternative fabric options that may address the
identifies
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 issues.
Also
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, the colour of
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the desighn
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desighn
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design
 of
logo
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 would
be change
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 because it spread all over the clothes on washing. I hope you
would
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 consider my issue and take
actions
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action
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 as soon as possible! Yours faithfully, Adam.

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grammar
Ensure to use the correct verb forms; e.g., 'informed' should be 'inform'.
clarity
Improve sentence structure for clarity; for example, instead of 'because it creates', use 'as it creates'.
coherence
It’s important to separate your thoughts more clearly; consider using paragraphs effectively to enhance overall readability.
content
You effectively highlighted the positive aspects of the uniform, such as creating unity and professionalism.
content
Your suggestion of allowing feedback on sizing is a practical approach to addressing the problem.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • uniform
  • professionalism
  • branding
  • comfort
  • fit
  • fabric quality
  • practicality
  • feedback
  • sizing
  • wear-test
  • alternative options
  • performance
  • concerns
  • appreciate
  • employees
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