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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The column chart gives information relating to the proportion of sexual identity who had no ability to read and write on a global scale as reported in the previous year.
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females
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 had
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a higher
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 percentage of non-literate people than
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males
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.
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, the region with the highest illiteracy rate is South Asia for both males and females.
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 analysis will begin with the subjects which had larger differences between the sexes. In connection with Sub-Saharan Africa, there were considerably more females at approximately 47%, than males, at around 30%. Regarding Arab States,
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, at over 50%, significantly exceeded
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males
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 by a margin of under 30%.
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, the figures noticeably
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female
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females
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 over
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males
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, amounting to around 57%
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 with nearly 35% in relation to South Asia. Turning to the remaining statistics which had smaller differences between the sexes. With respect to Developed Countries and
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/Caribbean, there was parity between
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females
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 and
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males
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 at 2% and 11% for the former and 1% and exactly 10% for the latter. As far as East Asia/Oceania, the figures for
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females
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 were slightly higher than for
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males
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, at 20% and under 10% respectively,

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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