In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts subjects (e.g. literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed? Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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an essential part of life for school or university students. in some schools and
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choose arts
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and boys tend to choose science
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disagree with
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as literature because of character. mostly
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chosen by
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more sensitive and susceptible.
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for their children and they prefer art
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can influence students' choices.
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tendency must be changed because students should choose whatever they want
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. There have been many
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poets and many
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disagree because from my own
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chose chemistry.
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have many female friends who chose math, physics and chemistry and male friends who chose literature,
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disagree that
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and boys tend to choose one or the other
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You presented a clear viewpoint about gender differences in subject choices and effectively expressed your disagreement with this tendency.
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You included personal experiences which add a relatable dimension to your argument.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social stereotypes
  • gender roles
  • arts subjects
  • science subjects
  • parental expectations
  • upbringing
  • role models
  • underrepresentation
  • STEM
  • curriculum bias
  • educational system
  • teacher bias
  • school environment
  • personal interests
  • natural aptitudes
  • gender representation
  • economic factors
  • job prospects
  • cultural expectations
  • historical context
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