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Writing Samples
Band 5

You recently broke your leg and your colleagues from work sent you get-well cards and presents. Write a letter to them and: - thank them for supporting you - describe how you spend your time - explain your recovery process

Dear colleagues I am writing
this
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 letter with
hope
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the hope
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 that you all are missing me badly at the office. I am very
greatful
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grateful
 for having you all as my coworker and friends. I
recieved
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received
 all the presents and get-well cards from you guys in
past
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the past
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week
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. I want to thank all of you for supporting me in
this
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 hard time.
Firstly
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, I am having
great
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a great
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 time with my family as i never had a vacation in
past
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the past
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 five years, despite first few days were very tough as my leg was fractured badly and had nothing to do except
bedrest
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bed rest
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,
also
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i
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I
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 can not walk without support.
However
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,
with
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as
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day
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days
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 passed
i
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I
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learn
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learned
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this
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about this
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 new AI app, it was fun, at
nights
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night
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 my cousins and my family
we
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apply
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all get gathered
an
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and
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watch
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watched
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movie
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movies
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 till midnight.
Also
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, my recovery is going well, as
i
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I
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 had
an
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a
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doctor
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doctor's
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 appointment yesterday, she told me, have to rest for one more
week
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 at home. On top of that,
doctor
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the doctor
a doctor
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 has suggested
me
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apply
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some leg
exercise
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exercises
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 for better recovery. Apart from my nesting, I'm very eager to join the office again from next
week
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. See you guys next
week
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. with Love Taylor,

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Task Achievement
Consider adding more details about your feelings regarding your recovery process to enhance emotional connection.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to structure your paragraphs better by clearly separating different ideas and focusing on one main idea per paragraph.
Task Achievement
Your warm and appreciative tone is well conveyed throughout the letter.
Coherence and Cohesion
You've included personal anecdotes that make the letter engaging to read.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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