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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
The pie graph illustrates the
production
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 of
electricity
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 by fuel sources in
Australia
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 and
France
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 between 1980 and 2000, measured by
units
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.
Overall
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, in the first year of manufacturing
electricity
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 using coal in
Australia
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 was higher than in
France
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.
However
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,
France
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 had more
production
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 of
electricity
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units
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 by nuclear power than
Australia
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 in the second year. Based on charts,
France
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 used a variety of bases for
electricity
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production
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 in 1980, natural gas and coal were commonly used sources, at 25
units
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.
Additionally
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, nuclear power based in 1980 was less than a fifth and changed to 126
units
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 in early 20th century
production
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.
This
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 means, that the
production
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 unit using nuclear power in 1980 was smaller than in 2000.
On the other hand
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,
Australia
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 used fewer sources than
France
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 in both years. By 1980,
Australia
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 used coal as a fuel for
electricity
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production
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, at one-half
units
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. Afterwards,
production
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 using coal in 2000 was bigger than in the early years, at 130
units
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.
However
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, the smallest source to use was oil in 1980 and getting smaller in 2000, at 2
units
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, electricity, australia, france, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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