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The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Two pictures demonstrate the town of Westley in two different timelines, one in 1815 and the other in the present day.
Overall
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, Westley changed from a small village with a lot of space to a modern city with various types of buildings. Back in the day, if you went from Tinton on the right side of the road, you would see Lord Westley's House.
Additionally
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, on the left side, you would open the view
on
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 Lenton Woods and Lake.
Furthermore
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, on the River Twine, there was a bridge that could be used to go to London. Most people were living near Town Hall and Market Square. Now, because of industrialization, the Main Railway Station was developed in the fields.
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, near the station cinema was built. The forest was cut to extend the living area for the Lenton Housing Estate.
And the
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 main Residential area extended to the south of the town.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • residential area
  • amenities
  • thoroughfare
  • connectivity
  • industrial development
  • factory
  • public amenities
  • recreational facilities
  • educational facilities
  • residential expansion
  • apartment blocks
  • commercial activity
  • shopping centers
  • restaurants
  • single-family homes
  • development
  • open field
  • noticeable change
  • replacing
  • establishment
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