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The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the ages of
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population
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the population
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 in New Zealand between 1950 and 2050. The data is measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is evident that the most
dominated
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 age throughout the period is over 65
years
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.
In
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 the
begining
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beginning
 of the period, the least significant age was (0-14)
years
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 but it shifted to the category (25-37) by the end of the period. In 1950 the
pecentage
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percentage
op
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 under 14
years
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 were less than 10% and it remained relatively stable until 1990. After that, it
increasrd
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increased
 steadily, being the same as younger adults (25-37
years
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), and it is estimated to be approximately 20% by 2050.
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, younger
adults
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 figures diminished gradually. It started at 20% in 1950 and experienced a slight decline over the next 40
years
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.
However
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, in 1990 the numbers sharply declined reaching about only 5% of the total
population
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 in 2025 and it is expected to hit
the
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zero by 2050.
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, older adults (38-45
years
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) were nearly 20% by 1950, and the number kept growing until it reached a peak in 1990, presenting almost half of the
population
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.
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, it had a
noteable
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notable
noticeable
 decrease and it is anticipated to level
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 in the next 25
years
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.
Finally
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, in 1950, elderly people
who
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aged over 65 comprised more than half of the
population
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. They
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 a steady expansion reaching about 70% in 1990. After that, it witnessed a considerable fall and it is expected to be approximately 50% in the future.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • steady increase
  • fluctuations
  • notable rise
  • projection
  • stabilization
  • plateauing
  • growth rate
  • population growth
  • timeline
  • trend
  • segment
  • economic conditions
  • migration policies
  • birth rates
  • data series
  • historical
  • forecast
  • intervals
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