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Some people think financial aid from international organizations is important for developing countries. Others believe that practical aid and advice is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is a burning topic is being discussed
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between people that there are more benefits of financial aid or
practicle
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practical
practice
g
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aid
 and advice from international
organizations
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underdeveloped
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 countries.
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aligning
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 statement
but
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let's explore
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both arguments.
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, A multitude of individuals
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importance
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the importance
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 of
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 resources over other things because they believe
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 a big budget is more crucial to
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 education more
convienient
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convenient
 for humankind. Growing nations need advancement in their institutes to boost
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development and for that money is the primary part. If
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will
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rely on already developed nations with just some
advices
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advice
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 and
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them
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to
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arrive
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 their land and help them on
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 level
then
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 they can not be
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independent
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 is
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recognization
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recognition
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 of developed countries
and
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which is only possible
by
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 funds. So there are more chances of being
indipendent
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independent
 by taking
finacial
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financial
 help from global
orgnaizations
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organisations
 rather than seeking
for
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guidance.
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, Folks on
other
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 hand are giving more
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 to
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 experience with instructions over the first assertation because as per them if international bodies can help them to teach some methods and they can perform that practically under the supervision of
organizations
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 will be a better choice to learn things perfectly. They
beleive
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believe
 if
organizations
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 can help them to be
skilles
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skills
skilled
then
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 they can bring wealth
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 the country. In
conculsion
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conclusion
, after discussing both sides I
am seeing
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financial aid is
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outweighing
to look
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 for supervision
under world
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underworld
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organizations
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 because of
more
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a more
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 possible
way
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 to heighten
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nations by considering the
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 on prior.

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task achievement
Clarify your thesis statement in the introduction to precisely outline your opinion. A strong thesis sets a clear direction for the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence that relates closely to the main idea. This helps guide the reader through your argument.
task achievement
Use specific examples to support your arguments. Including practical instances or data can strengthen your points and provide evidence for your claims.
coherence and cohesion
Review your spelling and grammar, as minor errors can detract from the overall quality and clarity of your writing.
content
The essay presents a clear discussion of both viewpoints regarding financial aid and practical advice.
task achievement
You have clearly expressed your opinion in the essay, which is important for task achievement.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial aid
  • international organizations
  • developing countries
  • practical aid
  • sustainable development
  • economic growth
  • infrastructure development
  • best practices
  • governance
  • empowerment
  • temporary solutions
  • customized solutions
  • effective programs
  • real change
  • relief funding
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