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The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.
The chart displays information about the
production
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 and
consumption
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 level of electricity in the top 10 countries in 2014.
Overall
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,the maximum level of electricity for both processes was in China and both levels were similar to each other.
On the other hand
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,the minimum import and export took happen in the Korean Republic.
According to
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 what is shown,after China's indicators,the United States took the first place over
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 and
consumption
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 processes,so they were 4099 and 3866,respectively.The third country which exceeds 1,000 billion kWh in order to give information is Russia.
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,the numbers of France,Brazil and Germany for
production
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 were 561.2,530.7 and 526,6,respectively and all of them were close to each other.
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,in all countries,indicators for
production
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 were higher than the numbers of
consumption
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 except for Germany.Because in there,the
consumption
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 process equalled 582.6 and the
production
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 level was 526.6.
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,in Japan,India and Canada,there was a lot of difference between
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 and
consumption
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.
For instance
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,in India,the numbers of
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 were 172.2 higher than indicators of
consumption
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hour (MWh)
  • capacity
  • output
  • distribution
  • consumption
  • production
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable energy
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • trend
  • pattern
  • discrepancy
  • regional
  • anomaly
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