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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email describe where you lived when you were a student at the university recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

Dear ABC, I am really glad to hear that you have been offered a place on a course at the university. Congratulations! It is a very challenging part to find accommodation during our study time. I am happy to help you
in
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with
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 that. When I was studying there, I lived in an apartment which was 10 minutes away from the university
and
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apply
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it was three bedrooms,
kitchen
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a kitchen
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 and
the
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a
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 spacious balcony attached
with
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to
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living
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the living
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 room. Sharing
place
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a place
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 with other academic people was not only affordable but
also
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 easily
make
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 friends. To find accommodation, I would recommend checking online platforms like Marketplace.
Moreover
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, if you join some groups on WhatsApp where people always share available
house
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houses
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,
so
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apply
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this
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 can be very helpful for you. But make sure
start
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to start
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 to find
early
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as early
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 as possible else you get
better
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the better
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 option with affordable rent. One thing I want to warn you is that do not trust
on
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the photos or videos because sometimes some students get caught out by old and misleading pictures. Let me know if you need any other help or have questions about
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the neighborhood
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neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. I am happy to help. Yours lovingly, XYZ.

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Consider providing a clearer introduction that outlines the purpose of the email more explicitly.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use linking phrases more effectively to enhance the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
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Expand on your warning about trusting photos and include a specific example or anecdote for better engagement.
positive feedback
You provided practical advice and personal experiences, which adds value to your email.
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Your email maintains a friendly and supportive tone, which is appropriate for the context.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dormitories
  • rental agreements
  • house-hunting
  • budgeting
  • commute
  • utilities
  • security deposit
  • lease
  • proximity
  • amenities
  • landlord
  • tenant rights
  • real estate agent
  • furnished/unfurnished
  • flatmates
  • on-campus/off-campus living
  • viewings
  • public transportation
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