In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Many
nations
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nowadays can provide international
food
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and
beverages
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through their local supermarkets. I personally believe
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is a major positive development since a community can promote an exchange of cultures and
also
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boost a nation's economy through worldwide shipping.
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with, in
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modern era, an exchange of international cultures, especially through culinary means, is becoming much easier. If people are curious about other countries' cultures through their
food
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specialties
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, they can swiftly buy the
food
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in nearby
markets
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instead
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of
traveling
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expensively. To illustrate, there is a K-Mart near my
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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that sells a wide range of Korean
food
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and
beverages
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.
As a result
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, it is becoming more common for locals to acknowledge Korean
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varieties
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as bibimbap, odeng, kimbap, etc.
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, it is
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beneficial for
nations
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to surge their economies by exporting their local products to international
markets
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. An international demand for local
food
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and
beverages
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will encourage local sellers and
markets
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, which
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could strengthen a nation's economy.
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, South Korea's becoming a developed country might be
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its strong position in the international economy, which is
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because of its major culinary influences and shipping to other
nations
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. Nowadays,
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may be only a minority of people in Indonesia who do not know about Korean
food
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due to
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its heavy influence in the
markets
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. In summary, the accessibility of international
food
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and
beverages
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is promoting positive development, which encourages cultural exchange and
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supports
nations
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' economies.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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